Well done for uploading your case study. Areas to strengthen:
1. On your first slide you need to clearly explain the title of the track and the band, nor provide a link to the music video.
2. Use capital letters for the name of the band and the track.
3. You say white people blamed black people for the Vietnam War. Connor this is a broad statement and inaccurate. You need to support this with evidence otherwise remove. It was the African Americans who had a high death toll. “Blacks were suffering disproportionately high casualty rates in Vietnam, and in 1965 alone they comprised almost one out of every four combat deaths yet only made up 11% of the population.” http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Vietnam_War_casualties More independent research would stop you making this kind of blunder.
The organisation of your discussion and at times careless punctuation makes your case study quite difficult to read. Rather than flashbacks the narrative structure is performance with a montage of generic images which heavy metal audiences will find familiar,
This is a challenging music video but I need more information about the band in order to assess accurately. Are they American, British or?
You have linked some basic elements of mise-en-scene to theory.
Well done for uploading your case study. Areas to strengthen:
ReplyDelete1. On your first slide you need to clearly explain the title of the track and the band, nor provide a link to the music video.
2. Use capital letters for the name of the band and the track.
3. You say white people blamed black people for the Vietnam War. Connor this is a broad statement and inaccurate. You need to support this with evidence otherwise remove. It was the African Americans who had a high death toll. “Blacks were suffering disproportionately high casualty rates in Vietnam, and in 1965 alone they comprised almost one out of every four combat deaths yet only made up 11% of the population.” http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Vietnam_War_casualties More independent research would stop you making this kind of blunder.
The organisation of your discussion and at times careless punctuation makes your case study quite difficult to read. Rather than flashbacks the narrative structure is performance with a montage of generic images which heavy metal audiences will find familiar,
This is a challenging music video but I need more information about the band in order to assess accurately. Are they American, British or?
You have linked some basic elements of mise-en-scene to theory.